Countdown to Death
Noah wakes up with a strange date on his write that magically keeps changing. He seeks Madame Roma's help to find the person who has cursed him. Will he find them before time runs out?
May not be suitable for all ages.
"The characters are really well developed in just a few short pages.....could some of Noah's dialog be shortened even more...using more gestures and non-verbals to convey his impatience and superiority? This looks like it may turn into a great mystery/morality story that will continue through the ages...like Dicken's A Christmas Carol."
"The mystery provides a layer of intrigue."
"It leaves me wondering and wanting to know what's coming."
"The characters haven’t been fully developed, and because of this I think the storyline lacks depth. It was all a bit too predictable and a bit stereotypical."
"I love the idea of this play - very creative and could lead to a very cool story. At this point, it does seem a little rough, which is to be expected at this stage. I think as you play with the language and the interatctions between your characters, you'll find more nuances. That being said, don't feel like you have to spell things out for your audience - make them figure some things out for themselves. I suspect as you continue to write you'll flesh out these beginning scenes and we will get a better sense of characters."